precious little fictions in 500 words (or less).
Fiction 05/02/07

One Word a Day, Five Hundred Days

by Rebecca Donnelly

“You’re making a mistake,” I said. “It’s a waste of time. People want stories that have energy, not ones that are primped and groomed like hothouse flowers.”

She took a sip of her drink and said she didn’t get it. Did I mean too delicate or too showy? She’s a clever girl, she knew just what I meant, but she’ll never admit to reading her father’s mind. I meant it was just too careful. She can’t pull this stunt off, writing only one word a day for five hundred days. I call that wasting her gifts all in the name of self-control, when she ought to be exploiting them. If this keeps up, I can imagine her in a few years sitting on top of a pillar in the desert or taking up residence in a cave. I didn’t raise her to be an ascetic. I can’t take this kind of thing.

Five days into this experiment I asked her how she was doing.

All she said was, “‘There was something in the.’” There was something in the. Nothing else.

Two days later I went and knocked on her door and asked her again.

She said, “‘There was something in the way the.’”

Sounds like a terrible start to me, but she’ll never take my advice. Children are like that—would rather self-destruct than listen to their parents. I asked her what she was doing with my money, what all these writing classes were for, if that’s all she was going to do and I was only going to see five hundred words hanging off the end of my twelve thousand dollars.

I went out the next day, the eighth day, because I couldn’t stand to be in the same house with it, the little tiny creeping silence she was making up there. She wasn’t going to do anything but write one word, and then I don’t know what she did. I went out and saw a movie. But I couldn’t watch it, I couldn’t think. All I was thinking was, noun? Or is it going to be an adjective finally? I was digging up the grammar I learned in grade school trying to think of what she might come up with next. Adverb? But it was worse than that.

I started to have nightmares. I’m not prone to anxiety, normally, but this was getting creepy. I could almost feel something living in the house, something growing monstrously inside it, but slowly, shoot by shoot. It was curling and climbing in the room up there, and I could feel it as soon as I walked in the door. I never saw her anymore, but she must have left sometimes, to go out and do things. There was no more her, just words. I wanted it over with, I wanted her to finish the thing or forget it. But there were still four hundred and eight-eight days left, and there was something in the way the words came together so slowly.



  1. 18 Comments
  2. Heather Berkley  Becca...all these years I've known you but never new you were such a talented writer...you must share more. I thoroughly enjoyed this short!
    Jun 7, 2007
  3. Lisa Ann  The story was fun. The end line is a great zinger.
    Jun 12, 2007
  4. Thomas  This is just awesome. Lovely, odd, engaging story.
    Jun 12, 2007
  5. Charles  Sometimes I feel this way with writing. The words come together slowly, painfully. I think this story is great. I just hope it didn't take you 500 days to complete.
    Jun 12, 2007
  6. Mary Peelen  I love the way this piece lets the writing itself, the slow excruciating creation of a short piece, become its own character. It quickly drew me into the slow, laborious work of writing ficiton. Very nice.
    Jun 12, 2007
  7. Anthony Press  Delicious ---- and crafted well, too. Thank you.
    Jun 12, 2007
  8. Marc Harshman   Marvelous. So much going on. It made me want to look over my shoulder as I read along with the story's own word by word accumulation. It was as if there were something building within the narrative that I had yet to discern. Surely, a sequel must come, and then another, and.... five hundred days of sequels, perhaps?
    Jun 12, 2007
  9. L Alonso  So that's the way it's done. I loved it.
    Jun 12, 2007
  10. Amy  love it!
    Jun 13, 2007
  11. Hema  lovely ...
    Jun 15, 2007
  12. Rachell  I am so envious of you. I try to write short, short stories like this, but I tend to explain too much. Gets weighted down. In the few short words, we know all about the writer, the slow painful process of creativity and the remarkable surprise when it all comes together. Thank you for your gift.
    Jun 19, 2007
  13. Carla St.gelais  So interesting. I have had teenagers, so I get it, not only the writing part, but the parenting part. I like how your words paint the image of conflict, struggle, two minds, all laced together with a literary theme.
    Jun 22, 2007
  14. Ugo  Great story...I envy your talent.
    Jul 24, 2007
  15. Autumn  Fabulous story.
    Aug 28, 2007
  16. Tara  Marvelous story. The ending is perfection.
    Sep 30, 2007
  17. Rob Hopcott  Nice work! And that was the first draft? I wonder whether a story is ever really finished? Certainly none of mine. Words can always be moved in or out. Paragraphs suddenly look better with altered sentence structure. Characters burst to tell more. Perhaps stories are alive. Once born, they just keep growing all by themselves.
    Oct 29, 2007
  18. Pranshu Arya  Beautifully written. Concise and poetic.
    Nov 15, 2007
  19. John Moriarty  Thank you. I have two such. I appreciate you're allowing me to understand my feelings differently. And theirs.
    Aug 26, 2008


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